It was the book prompt that elicited the following, not that it shows. It's part of my world building for something I'm expanding. I had laid down a few more sentences heading (in my meandering way) straight for that stack of journals, but I got pulled over by the word count police. Dang.
Thank you for the opportunity Karl.
"Afterward, while Rachel lay sleeping, Donovan let himself out of her apartment. As he shut the door and felt the lock click into place he could sense, could even see, the early light behind the door bouncing off the floors, soaring up into the ceilings, and he already dreaded going back to his flat. He sighed and walked, his sax case banging against his thigh, walked and sighed, handle squeaking every third step, or every fourth, or sometimes.
Back in his flat he opened his only window then closed it again. He snapped open the case and went into the closet. "
"Afterward, while Rachel lay sleeping, Donovan let himself out of her apartment."
That is an excellent example of how we can understand context without needing to dot every i for the reader - which means more concise writing and storytelling. Well done!
It was the book prompt that elicited the following, not that it shows. It's part of my world building for something I'm expanding. I had laid down a few more sentences heading (in my meandering way) straight for that stack of journals, but I got pulled over by the word count police. Dang.
Thank you for the opportunity Karl.
"Afterward, while Rachel lay sleeping, Donovan let himself out of her apartment. As he shut the door and felt the lock click into place he could sense, could even see, the early light behind the door bouncing off the floors, soaring up into the ceilings, and he already dreaded going back to his flat. He sighed and walked, his sax case banging against his thigh, walked and sighed, handle squeaking every third step, or every fourth, or sometimes.
Back in his flat he opened his only window then closed it again. He snapped open the case and went into the closet. "
Aha, and what does he do in the closet? :-)
"Afterward, while Rachel lay sleeping, Donovan let himself out of her apartment."
That is an excellent example of how we can understand context without needing to dot every i for the reader - which means more concise writing and storytelling. Well done!